Jeff Brown

Who Said Poetry Had to Rhyme, Be Serious or Sane



Posted: Friday, June 05, 2009

by Jeff Brown
Inner Projection

Poetry for the many or the masses would be the following:

Roses are red
Violets are blue
Sugar is Sweet
And so are you

This is familiar ground for most. It rhymes, it's easy and requires little thought. But there is much more to poetry than meets the cliche eye or, should I say, ear.

If you are a trained poet, you learn that rhyme often forces meaning or in an attempt to rhyme one is taken down a more obvious road or one that can even take the writer off the original road down more predictable or expected paths.

But poetry should not be predictable. It should divert from the expected. It should surprise. It should stimulate imagination and wonder. Poetry fills our lives by explaining the mundane, the everyday in new and exciting ways that fill us with awe. With that in mind, I send you to the world of the great poet Russell Edson. This one is called "The Toy Maker":




A toy-maker made a toy wife and a toy child.
He made a toy house and some toy years.
He made a getting-old toy, and he made a dying toy.
The toy-maker made a toy heaven and a toy god.
But, best of all, he liked making toy shit.


Or how about "The Angel":



They have little use. They are best as objects of torment.
No government cares what you do with them

Like birds, and yet so human . . .


They mate by briefly looking at the other.

Their eggs are like white jellybeans.


Sometimes they have been said to inspire a man
to do more with his life than he might have.
But what is there for a man to do with his life?


. . . They burn beautifully with a blue flame.

Then they cry out it is like the screech of a tiny hinge;
the cry of a bat. No one hears it . . .


Note the originality, the passion, the taking of the expected and twisting to create the new. 

Next I'd like to introduce the reader to the Pulitzer Prize winner, Charles Simic. This one's called "Clouds Gathering." Note the detailed prose-like description as well as the awe inspiring wonder, the gaping hole of the warm womb of the universe he allows us to step into. Wonder and awe invoked.




It seemed the kind of life we wanted.
Wild strawberries and cream in the morning.
Sunlight in every room.
The two of us walking by the sea naked.

Some evenings, however, we found ourselves
Unsure of what comes next.
Like tragic actors in a theater on fire,
With birds circling over our heads,
The dark pines strangely still,
Each rock we stepped on bloodied by the sunset.

We were back on our terrace sipping wine.
Why always this hint of an unhappy ending?
Clouds of almost human appearance
Gathering on the horizon, but the rest lovely
With the air so mild and the sea untroubled.

The night suddenly upon us, a starless night.
You lighting a candle, carrying it naked
Into our bedroom and blowing it out quickly.
The dark pines and grasses strangely still.




The ending in awe. The ending incomplete. The mystery. For goodness sake, Mr. Simic, what next?! It's poetry but prose as well, Hemingway in the mix. Notice how both poems take the mundane, the examined and present it unique. The language, the images created are only those Edson and Simic provide. No clichés here. No expanding on the roses are red theme, pounding the reader with the dull, the expected. Hell, our lives are full of that, why require it of our poetry? Let's take a look at a few more before we retire.

Here's another prize winner, Nobel Laureate Wislawa Szymborska. Here's one with a twist, the unexpected filling holes with ethereal ooooos and awwws in our gaping, desperate to be filled heads, hearts, and souls. Here's one called "A 'Thank You' Note."
 

There is much I owe
to those I do not love.


The relief in accepting
they are closer to another.


Joy that I am not
the wolf to their sheep.


My peace be with them
for with them I am free,
and this, love can neither give,
nor know how to take.


I don't wait for them
from window to door.
Almost as patient
as a sun dial,
I understand
what love does not understand.
I forgive
what love would never have forgiven.


Between rendezvous and letter
no eternity passes,
only a few days or weeks.


My trips with them always turn out well.
Concerts are heard.
Cathedrals are toured.
Landscapes are distinct.


And when seven rivers and mountains
come between us,
they are rivers and mountains
well known from any map.


It is thanks to them
that I live in three dimensions,
in a non-lyrical and non-rhetorical space,
with a shifting, thus real, horizon.


They don't even know
how much they carry in their empty hands.

"I don't owe them anything",
love would have said
on this open topic.


Note the line breaks, where the line-end emphasis comes within the stanza and at their ends to enhance and create meaning.

I understand (boom, emphasis here)
what love does not understand.
I forgive
(boom, emphasis here)
what love would never have forgiven.


Note with all this poetry that there is something of the unfamiliar. Note how it expresses in the unique. Note how it not only attempts but goes beyond what exists. It is not cliché. It is not complex. It is not mundane. It is even simple expressing the profound. Language expanding and deepening as the words build, word upon simple word.

One more for the reader and then we are done: "Body Builder's Contest" by Wislawa Szymborska.
 

From scalp to sole, all muscles in slow motion.
The ocean of his torso drips with lotion.
The king of all is he who preens and wrestles
with sinews twisted into monstrous pretzels.


Onstage, he grapples with a grizzly bear
the deadlier for not really being there.
Three unseen panthers are in turn laid low,
each with one smoothly choreographed blow.


He grunts while showing his poses and paces.
His back alone has twenty different faces.
The mammoth fist he raises as he wins
is tribute to the force of vitamins.


Work the words. Work the combinations. Work the starts and stops. Build the passion. Build your hops. Like anything worth its salt it takes time and effort to build. Get the lazies out if you want to touch the masses. Stretch into and through the intuitive. Let the child in you ask, "When I die will I dream of dinosaurs?" Wonder if puddles are prisons and for the average sentence of each drop. Spend time outside the given and the existing to ponder and play. Let your child rise in simplicity to wonder and wander today. Love words enough to turn every reader's stomach into a 24/7 oven baked wonder wall of mother charmed hugs. Let the child in you put all doubt and worry on hold, if not just for a day. Write on brothers and sisters, write on today.

 

Jeff is a Career, Life, & Mentor coach & CEO of  www.InnerProjection.com: working with students and parents using the proprietary Success, Design and Preparation system creating a plan to ensure his clients are of the 30% of college grads who don't waste 10 to 15 years or leave 100s of thousands of dollars on the table.

Prior to owning Inner Projection, Jeff worked as a computer programmer and in tech. support, but hated it enough to move from his home in Connecticut to do stand up comedy in Boston where he worked with such comics as Bill Burr, Dan Cook, and Billy Martin and wrote for people like Mz. Michigan who needed material for her ventriloquism act. He then moved to Los Angeles to do more stand up, but found being a coach & college instructor more rewarding. He's married with 3 children.

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» left by Cheryl Janecky
2 years 352 days ago.
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Good insights - and choice of poems/prose - like art - the meaning is unique to the viewer, even if
 
the subject is simple. Thanks for taking the time to express your views - I feel like I know YOU from this more than from many articles...that's putting some of you, into it - Good Fortune! Cheryl
» left by Jeff Brown 2 years 352 days ago.
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Cheryl, Thanks so much for your kind comments.
» left by jena
2 years 352 days ago.
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Thanks for sharing. I totally agree with your perspective on poetry.
» left by Jeff Brown 2 years 352 days ago.
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Jena, thanks for the comment. And I've recently read some of your work. You certainly have passion and that's more than half the job. Keep up the good writing.
» left by David Pekrul
2 years 352 days ago.
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There seems to be two different camps of thought; one saying that rhyming restricts the expression in poetry, the other that says that rhyming keeps the romance in poetry. I can see both sides of the argument, but I most often tend to write poetry that rhymes; It's just something that comes natural to me and something I enjoy. I must admit though, that the few non-rhyming poems I have written, were written more from emotion than thought and I tend to find the feelings and messages in them to be more powerful.
» left by Jeff Brown 2 years 351 days ago.
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"I must admit though, that the few non-rhyming poems I have written, were written more from emotion than thought and I tend to find the feelings and messages in them to be more powerful"

Yes, "powerful" is the key word here. I studied under Dorothy Barressi and she and others almost across the board advocate non-rhyme. But rhyming is still used just not often.
» left by Dr Clarence Rucker, Jr
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2 years 352 days ago.
Jeff, I enjoyed. I have enjoyed many poems that did not rhyme. I can also remember as a kid growing up around "Hitsville" in Detroit when it seems like the whole building was walking around making rhymes to songs. Thanks for bringing back my childhood memories.
» left by Jeff Brown 2 years 351 days ago.
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There's always a place and time for rhyme. Thanks for reading. 
» left by Ken McCreless
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Great advice, Jeff, but where would we be without "Green Eggs and Ham?" But seriously, many times a non-rhyming poem has more power than one that does simply because the author did not chase down a word that sounded like another.
» left by Jeff Brown 2 years 350 days ago.
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Ken, my point exactly. But Dr. Suess is the exception; he's also one of my favorites. Thanks for commenting. 
» left by Connor Davidson
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Great article. Well done.
 
I see your point - I can appreciate poetry if it does not rhyme. But I still enjoy how poetry that does rhyme, both flow but I find as a general rule ones that rhyme flow that little bit better. I also find poetry that rhymes more relaxing to read and easier to remember. But I wont dismiss poetry that does not rhyme.
» left by Jeff Brown 2 years 350 days ago.
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Case in point, Dr. Suess. The Master. The Man. The Legend. But too much rhyming can get rather staid, if that's all you write as a poet. Thanks for reading / commenting. 
» left by Sandra E. Graham
2 years 349 days ago.
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Very nice, Jeff. I'm not good with poetry, I love reading it; especially poetry that makes you see and feel the words in picture.
 
Thanks for sharing.
 
Sandra
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Sandra,

Thanks for taking the time to read and comment.
» left by Anonymous
2 years 347 days ago.
What poetic form or meter do you enjoy most? Sonnet, quatrain? I regard the latter highly, for my love of the Rubaiyat. If a poem isn't deep, then it is just a rhyme.
» left by Jeff Brown 2 years 347 days ago.
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Omar Khayyam, mathematician, poet, astronomer  is one of my favorites. His writing is very deep and dense. You can see his creative, scientific mind at work. Some of the most profound and instructive poetry to this day.

Personally, I'm not a fan of any particular form, rather a fan of certain poets. The one's I've mentioned in my article, of course. But others would be Maya Angelou, Li Young Lee, Gwendolyn Brooks, Lucille Clifton, William Carlos Williams . . . I like stuff that's adventuresome but readable. Nothing too esoteric or imperceptible.
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